Monday, September 26, 2011

Exposition Revision

Int. smoking patio - day
All the freaks except NICK are sitting by the smoking patio. Nick walks into frame 

NICK
Hey guys! I found out that Led Zeppelin is having a tribute to John Bonham here in Michigan!
DANIEL
                     That’s cool man, We should go. It would definitely be some fun 
NICK
Let’s make it a double date, a real one this time. Sorry Ken
KEN
It’s alright Nick, I have something better to do on a Saturday night anyways.

REVISED : 

NICK
Hey guys, I was walking down by the old record shop and I saw a poster. The Gods are holding a tribute concert for John Bonham. My life would be complete if I go!

DANIEL
Sounds like a good time to me. I wouldn't mind joining you.

KIM
Are you gunna bring you're little girlfriend?

NICK
She's not my girlfriend, and I would like her to go. 

DANIEL
Let's make it a double date then

KEN
Thanks guys, I know I'll have much more fun sitting at home staring at the walls.



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