Concept 29

INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
A party is going on when the house phone rings. MARK the parents son answers the phone in his parents bedroom.

MARK
Hello?

DAD
Hey Mark, there's been a change of plans. We're on our way now.

MARK
What? Uhm. I thought you guys were coming tomorrow morning?

DAD
We were supposed to but there was some problem with the hotel reservation and we didn't really want to stay here anyways. So we decided to come back now. We should be home in about 45 minutes. We've been on the road for a while now.

MARK
Why didn't you call me earlier?

DAD
Didn't really think about it.

MARK
Okay. I'll see you guys in a bit.

Mark quickly hangs up the phone and begins to clean as fast as he can.

MARK
I didn't expect them to come home so early. I need to clean this house!

Mark walks to the living room where the party is going on and beings to yell.

MARK
Everybody needs to go! Someone just called the cops on us. Come on come on go go go.

All Marks friends make there way out of the house like a herd of sheep.

Concept 28

My last birthday I went to Reno Nevada.

INT. SILVER LEGACY - MORNING

VIDAL
We're finally here!
JASON
Such a long drive!
ARLENE
Come on let's go check in so we can get our rooms.
JOSE
Let's go.

INT. HOTEL ROOM - DAY

VIDAL
Feels so good to finally lay in a bed!
JASON
Come on Jr. Lets go bowl.
MIRIAN
Here take $40 and go bowling and get something to eat.
JASON
What are you guys gunna do?
JOSE
Gamble! What else is there to do in Nevada.

Concept 27

1. The setting that most appeals to me would be at lunch while she is at her favorite café. I would choose this location because the girl is at a place where she is comfortable. Also she is in no rush to get to class so she will have time to listen to thatcher's plea.

2. My script would be about two high school freshman on their first day of school. They've been friends for a long time and are chatting about the differences of high school classrooms to middle school classrooms. They talk about everything from lighting to the desks.

3. In my own short I plan to use the school, a local park, and my house. At the school I would use classrooms, the library, and the forum. At the park I would use the large grass area. At my house I would use my living room.

Groundhog Day

In Groundhog Day the main character lives the same day over and over again. The structure in Groundhog Day is mostly the same as the structure in Run Lola Run. The other movies are very different in structure because Citizen Kane is purely flashbacks and Memento goes backwards in time.

Foolish Decisions

Format 1
Conflict 2
Characters 2

This screenplay was alright. There were problems with the format, spelling and grammatical errors were evident throughout the entire screenplay. The conflict was something that doesn't happen often in real life but is a concept seen in many shows and movies.

Xavier Pilot

Format 3
Conflict 3
Characters 3

This is probably the best script that I have read so far in this class. It has a great conflict that not only teenagers can relate to but adults as well. There are no errors in the format and the characters are not just one sided.

Sixth Period Pilot

Format 3
Conflict 2
Characters 2

I like this screenplay. The conflict seems true and interesting and the format is spot on for the most part.

Cheaters

Format 1
Conflict 2
Characters 2

The format of this screenplay was incorrect. The punctuation and capitalization needs some major work.

Psycho Reflection

Psycho's screenplay is very unique. It uses a lot of directions and many descriptions as to what happens and what goes on. The story bounces from location to location. The characters are unique because they are three dimensional and don't only have one side to them. The writer sneaks in many things that without close attention will go unheard. The humor is a sort of dark humor.

Concept 25

One person, one team, one year, Vidal is about to face the challenge of a lifetime as he plays for the school soccer team.

Pilot # 3

Format 2
Characters 2
Conflict 3

I like the fact that modern day teen slang and language was used. I would suggest that the writers focus a bit more on punctuation and the other minor writing mistakes, other than that th conflict might be a little tough to continue in several episodes.

Pilot #1

Format 2
Characters 2
Conflict 3

I would suggest making the transitions a bit smoother and making the story a bit more clearer.